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Helplessness Pyramid by *Daiichi:iconDaiichi:

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There
Hear that?
Oh you don't?
Listen closely
Deafening silence
That is the apparence
Of being truly helpless
To go beyond what's powerless
To stop my hopes and my dreams alike
The pain that comes when realization strikes
Just 'cause I don't want my world to pass me by
Doesn't mean things will change, no matter how I try

Where
Am I?
Am I lost
In blissful thoughts
Or in the future?
Either is no suture
When I look at the present
And my friends don't seem permanent
I can only walk in a straight line
Yet my friends turn cirlces around that line
So that not one is there for the in-between
With no choice but to leave the friend that isn't seen.
©2004-2009 *Daiichi
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Submitted: October 17, 2004
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Well, it's how I feel right now. I might be in school, pursuing my field of study, and getting this fancy comp, and looking to secure a meeting with my gf..But..My world is changing again..And I am as powrless to stop it now as I was two yeas ago..As I was 3 years ago, and four..

My one friend that I spend the most time with is seeming pretty permanent..But just two days ago I learned that I'm probably endanger of losing one of my most beloved friends, because I simply can't be around when she has time, or I ust can't seem to contact her..I'm working harder to fix that by emailing her and trying to help her with other things..But stuff like that reminds me of what always happens..I've been forced to watch great friends, some I've met and some I know in person, just kind of fade away in my life..and it's something I hate more than death itself..Because a relationship has its own life..And every time one goes awy, or strains, it dies in a way..And anything dying tears at my heart..So here I am in this state with no one to comfort me..And I'm a guy who needs comfort..Everyone's moving on in their lives..Reaching milestones, doing more with themselves..And the more they do that, the more 2 dimensional I feel..And it hurts..

So I guess this is dedicated to everyone..
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~jvtager:iconjvtager: Oct 17, 2004, 10:44:46 PM
oh poor collin, i really hope you feel better :hug: i know how you feel the same thing happens to me too, i dun think ive ever had a friend for longer than 3 years (either i move or they move) but that's mostly the millitaries fault...but im so sorry that your having this hardship :hug: i hope you will feel better too

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To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world. :blowkiss: and you know my world is you...
*Daiichi:iconDaiichi: Oct 18, 2004, 6:39:05 AM
Thanks Katie..I'm just working through some worries and fears..I have a bit more of a chance to control it all, it's just tough..But yeah, thanks a lot.
~mouselet:iconmouselet: Oct 19, 2004, 3:44:41 PM
:hug: Now this is a heartbreaking poem. Nice to see you haven't lost your touch.

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"If I knew what I was looking for, I could probably find it." -papercut
"Only the injured can truly love, only the maimed can truly mourn."
It could be worse! Couldn't it?
*Daiichi:iconDaiichi: Oct 19, 2004, 5:50:54 PM
You're telling me, I had to battle the feelings myself..Yeesh..*smiles* But thank you, I'm glad to see that I haven't either. :hug: Thanks for reading it, that in itself is helpful.
~mouselet:iconmouselet: Oct 19, 2004, 5:53:21 PM
You're welcome. ^^

I'm stuck in a rut. All I've done for days is bloody sticky note abstractions.

--
"If I knew what I was looking for, I could probably find it." -papercut
"Only the injured can truly love, only the maimed can truly mourn."
It could be worse! Couldn't it?
*Daiichi:iconDaiichi: Oct 19, 2004, 5:54:52 PM
Could you artfully combine those abstractions into a poetic description of your hidden anguish? That'd be like modern poetry..hehe..
~mouselet:iconmouselet: Oct 19, 2004, 6:51:16 PM
...no.

You're sure you're feeling okay?

--
"If I knew what I was looking for, I could probably find it." -papercut
"Only the injured can truly love, only the maimed can truly mourn."
It could be worse! Couldn't it?
*Daiichi:iconDaiichi: Oct 19, 2004, 7:49:23 PM
Well, I gotta say I'm kinda flip-flopping from real happy to real sad..Just hoping I don't lose any long time friends any time soon..
!imkelleyo:iconimkelleyo: Oct 20, 2004, 4:25:27 AM
this one has a somewhat furturistic feel to it...I LIKE IT =D

I really like
To stop my hopes and my dreams alike
The pain that comes when realization strikes
Just 'cause I don't want my world to pass me by
Doesn't mean things will change, no matter how I try
*Daiichi:iconDaiichi: Oct 20, 2004, 7:49:44 AM
It must have been this poem that I had the line and line problem..*sighs* Too tired I'm mixing them up..But yeah..THose feelings were hard to convey in the Pyramid style..so when I found a way to do it I was feeling pretty good
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